The charts below compare five different countries, showing the electricity used (measured in megawatts or mw) in a typical hospital during one week, and also the number of emergency medical calls made by local residents during the same week. The last chart shows the average time (in minutes) spent on assessing emergency cases by hospital medical staff before the patients are treated.
Viktoriia Victory’s comments
This candidate would achieve band 9 for this essay. The Task is complex, but the candidate correctly groups the data in a logical way. She introduces the paragraph about electricity clearly and groups France/Japan together (fluctuating trend), then Canada/Russia together (rising trend) and finally she points out that Argentina is an exception (declining.)
In the emergency calls paragraph, the candidate shows that she sees a similar trend, with the same 4 countries grouped together and Argentina being different.
In the patient assessment paragraph, she makes it clear that the trend is not continued (all countries are stable, there is no grouping) and that Russia is now the exception (rising.)
The charts contain a large amount of data, but the candidate selects some key figures to illustrate the trends. The detail is precise but carefully chosen. There is a variety of structures to present the figures, including the phrase ‘respectively’ and the correct use of brackets in the third paragraph. The candidate uses roughly half/about half to show that she understands the proportions, without adding too much detail. | The summary is very effective, because it sums up the key trends described (the relationship between electricity/emergency calls) and it also highlights the exception of Russia in the assessment time chart.
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